I rewrote the entire FranciscShow episode one script. I changed a lot of the dynamics.
It flows better, but I’m not 100% on Act 2, nor the end. Act 3 is iffy.
I tried my best to leave the dialogue open for interpretation, but I just feel like the ideas are forced together too much and there isn’t enough characterization.
At the same time, I’m not sure where to go with the Francisco character, so characterization is obviously hard.
Hopefully some more re-writes will open it up. This extra week of prep should help.